I wrote this, what you think?

Hi. very sad story poem. There may be no words to express what this poem story makes me feel. I'm so sorry for your hurt. And for your loss. Life sometime is pretty un fair, man cannot get along with one another and violence and hatred is spreading all over the World, we need god in our lives. This is very heart touching and depressing , The story you tell is very captivated and descriptive Good writing you are a very good story teller.